The Official Writing Challenge
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Good grip on a story and worded to capture attention. Suggest paying close attention to grammar & punctuation, though - run it through a spell/grammar check. English isn't everyone's strong suit, but don't let it stop a good writer!
Your fourth paragraph reached out and grabbed me--good job!

Unless he had a mouthful of feathers, I think you meant "foul" mouthed. An easy mistake to make. And watch for shifts from present tense to past tense.

Keep writing, your message was very important.
I'm glad God had other plans for Tom as He has for so many of us. Thanks for sharing.
Did you mean that Tom was 'staggering' past the church? Nicely written. I like the questions about how he would be greeted - makes us think.