The Official Writing Challenge
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09/14/18
I enjoyed reading this, good message throughout.
Blessings~
I enjoyed your poem. One thing that came to mind as I read this line...

"when we confess our sins
and receive his pardon."

...was that it might rhyme better right there if it read:

"when we confess our sins and
by His blood be cleansed."

Thank you for this. Keep writing!
09/18/18
Lots of excellent thoughts in your piece. The rhyme scheme is inconsistent throughout; I'm not certain if it is intentional or if there was a loss for rhyming words. Rhyme often times limits ones word usage and in my opinion more difficult to write.