The Official Writing Challenge
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I think you had a lot of good points and I enjoyed the poetic way you put your thoughts together.

I think it could have been better with a more narrow focus to tie everything together and a good concluding stanza.
I'm trying to understand the first two lines. Perhaps I'm culturally uninformed about the T and the biscuits. Bet this is because I'm an American.