The Official Writing Challenge
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Good job telling the story through dialogue. You did a good job describing the setting of your characters and the way that Donny looked and sounded.

You chose a more complicated dialogue format at the beginning, with a dialogue within a dialogue. It would be good for you to look up the punctuation rules for such a format since it makes the setting a little confusing if it isn't punctuated appropriately.