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04/26/18
This article paints a vivid picture of Crystal's thoughts and fears and, finally of the road home. Good job!
04/26/18
I really, really liked this. Describes well our inner wrestling. I believe this is worth perfecting. Personally, I would rework the last couple paragraphs for a stronger, impactful ending. Just my opinion, but when you rewrite without the requirement of fitting it to the topic of Amazing, I think it will be an even more powerful story. Be encouraged. This is good writing.
04/26/18
Great job with this! I enjoyed it from the very beginning to the very last word.

Wonderful writing and you nailed the topic beautifully.

Well done,

Blessings~
04/26/18
This was good and, with a little revision, would be great!
04/28/18
Powerful rendering of the twisted knot that fear and unforgiviness can bring.

It’s usually better to leave off bluntly stating the topic and let the story speak for itself.

But excellent writing!
04/28/18
Powerful rendering of the twisted knot that fear and unforgiviness can bring.

It’s usually better to leave off bluntly stating the topic and let the story speak for itself.

But excellent writing!
04/30/18
Good descriptions had me feeling the fear, heartbreak, anger, and the peace Crystal found in prayer.
In general, I am really drawn to the struggles that go on inside a person. Good submission.
So nice to see you again my friend! You did a fine job of jumping right into the conflict and pulled me right into the story. Congratulations on placing 3rd in your level. Happy Dance!
Thank you, my sister writer, and for everyone's comments. I promised myself to write last week, and only managed the two hours it took to write this. Struggling to make time to write again. This piece was written as a tribute for those women who are struggling to stay in marriages that contain intentional abuse from their unrepentant spouses, and to raise awareness. It is not easy, and we as the Body of Christ need to support such as those without judgment, but with compassion,understanding, and empathy...