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08/25/17
I loved your words at the end of this exciting entry, "I did not look down" --- That's a good thought for all, do not look down, I would add, "Look up" and there you will find all the strength that is needed.

Great entry,

Blessings~
08/25/17
I also have a fear of heights as well as age related balance issues, but oh, how I envy you for your trip to the Holy Land and Masada. Tell your friends - it's a good testimony!
08/26/17
I have never been to Israel, but I can imagine how exciting it would be to walk where Jesus walked.

I would either be looking out or closing my eyes for part of my tour of Masada.
I understand you were afraid but YOU LEFT ME HANGING.

I would have liked to have been brought to an end and have found out about "the mountain".

The first two paragraphs were a little rocky but it got us in the mood to expect more fits of fright.

I did like what you were trying to express.
I understand you were afraid but YOU LEFT ME HANGING.

I would have liked to have been brought to an end and have found out about "the mountain".

The first two paragraphs were a little rocky but it got us in the mood to expect more fits of fright.

I did like what you were trying to express.
08/29/17
It was a nice story about your visit to Jerusalem. An experience worth reading about.

Some little errors could have been avoided if read out loud or to someone else.


I agree with Larry. It ended to abruptly for me.

I think you hit the topic, but needed more about your fears in an active way.

Tell us what those fears did to you, i.e., "I broke out into a cold sweat, my hand trembled grabbing the entrance to the lift..." These are rudimentary, but maybe you get the idea.

Tell us more about your visit. I bet it was inspirational. God bless