The Official Writing Challenge
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07/13/17
This was a fun fictional account of the Biblical story.

Red Ink: Instead of using {his grandma} you could have written: his grandma, Savta. Instead of giving Caleb's mother a name, you could have referred to her as his mother. This would have made the meaning of the Hebrew words clear without having to define them at the end.
07/14/17
Lovely job!
Well done,
Blessings~