The Official Writing Challenge
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05/07/17
Very well done. I think you could have left Jesus' name out of the story because it was clearly Jesus. But a good fit for the topic.
05/07/17
Very good. It started out very well. It was a good hook, but predictable. Even though it was predictable, you made it interesting and a good read. You hit the topic well. I enjoyed it very much. Well done. God bless.
05/09/17
You did good job of writing and telling the story, I agree you could have left the name out we would know, and if we didn't we would want to find out.
Very interesting use of the word Entertainer. Well written though I did see a misspelled word. I am trying hard to make myself read back over mine for mistakes in spelling and vocabulary.