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05/07/17
You gave the reader a lot of facts about entertainment. A good piece for bible study. I would have liked to have seen you continue the personal level about why "YOU" didn't need entertainment. Why you were enlightened.

A few minor missing words, i.e., :need to entertained (left out be).

I don't think you needed "fro" in to and fro from work.

Just reread to correct these in the future.

You had a lot of good linformation. God bless.
05/08/17
You certainly exposed some dangers that would be influential to younger readers - if they could be encouraged to take note from someone who has been there, done that." Well done and I agree, good material for a Bible Study.
05/08/17
You certainly exposed some dangers that would be influential to younger readers - if they could be encouraged to take note from someone who has been there, done that." Well done and I agree, good material for a Bible Study.
05/09/17
I agree you gave plenty examples of how to escape in entertainment. I was hoping to hear your story of how you escaped from that dark world and how you were enlightened to the truth. I was in a relationship with a drug addict and he also was addicted to movies. So I understand how someone can escape the past .
Good job.