The Official Writing Challenge
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03/06/17
Nice poem!
I feel that all the breakable things mentioned should have been grouped together at the first and then finished with your concluding thoughts.

Keep your poetry coming. We all need to experience reading it.
I really enjoyed this. The order of some of the verses seemed odd to me at times, but I really liked your message.
03/08/17
I enjoyed your poem. It was a little disjointed to me or maybe out of rhythm. I am no expert in poetry so take that with a grain of salt. I hope to see more of yours.