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The story was great. Very creative. I felt like I was right there, floating down the river with you. And I could sense your mom's panic and relief, at the same time.

The only thing I would change is the last sentence. I was uncertain as to who you were asking to pray for you. Was it the reader of your story, or your mom?
02/17/17
Loved the title, and loved your story!
Well done,
Blessings~
02/17/17
Very dramatic story; well done!
02/18/17
The pace and phrasing of this entry seemed so authentic to me. I could picture a boy & his dog getting into trouble & finding a way to help each other.

I'm not sure about some of the grammar...but then again, that seems to lend itself to the young MC and his telling of his adventure.

It will be interesting to see how it does with the judges. I give it two thumbs up...for whatever that's worth. Can't wait to read more from you.
I know it may not matter but I could not determine if the main character was a boy or a girl. I know the dog has to be a girl (I think) because I use the name "Snookums" as an endearing name for young girls.

I like the fast action. The slipping in could have been described a little more for readers to see it in action.

Help me with this. Does the verb in this phrase "favorite TV show comes on" match with the other verbs in your sentence?

I can see a "boy" almost doing this on purpose, if he thought he could get away with it.

I liked the read.
02/19/17
Right on topic. Good read. A few suggestions. These are just my points of view. Hope they help. I would move the sentence: "I panicked and started screaming..." to be the first sentence. Then you've got me. Go back and count the "was, were, and am" verbs. Replace the sentence with action verbs. Look forward to future writings.