The Official Writing Challenge
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It seems I really had a hard time getting into this one. I think it was just the unfamiliar words.
This has a lot of potential. I smiled at the MC in the opening paragraph. The juxtaposition of words like epicurean and sammich bothered me a bit. I think you could have made it work if you used dialog and thoughts to show the personality of your MC, along with some body language and saved the fancier words for narration. You definitely nailed the topic and created an interesting character.
12/01/16
Congratulations, Mike, on you 3rd place finish in the Intermediate category.