The Official Writing Challenge
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11/05/16
I love your ending. It ties the story together beautifully. But I found the beginning confusing. Maybe you could have started with the third paragraph. That would have set the scene. It has all I needed to know about the characters and the television report explains the disease. I also felt that the report news report in the second section was too long. Instead, maybe you could have had a scene between the two characters in which they react to the strange situation.
You have a nice "it could be" story with meaning in the last line.

And is that going to be the last chapter in this short story?