The Official Writing Challenge
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There was an ease to your writing I enjoyed. Start, climax and end all felt balanced so I could focus on the take home which I enjoyed and could implement more. Nice story.
An easy read that carried the rhythm of the message. Wasted your first sentence I felt. I couldn't help feeling like Rebecca was gypped. He dumps a concept that's foreign to her and then walks off. It felt a bit smug to me. In all though, I felt you introduced and explored a concept really nicely.