The Official Writing Challenge
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This is nice. It is like a poetic prose piece.

I like its style.
This is a poetic piece. You show some nice examples. I tend to be old school pertaining to incomplete sentences. It's okay to do it once or twice, but it felt like you had more incomplete sentences and run ons than complete ones, and that caused my brain to overload. I guess in a way, it could be a touch of genius, showing the reader an overload of incomplete sentences, which makes one stop and think if it was done on purpose. I did really enjoy some of your descriptions and imagery, and I thought it was quite clever. Your message is a profound one for sure. I think this is one of those pieces that the more I read it, the more things I notice. Nice job.