The Official Writing Challenge
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Great writing, the reader can feel the exhaustion and pain your MC is going thru. Nice resolution at the end.
I was pulling for Hank all the way, hoping he would survive. I think the last paragraph summarized the story well but might have flowed even better if it had written from the MCs point of view. Instead of Hank made it . . . it could have started with something like, "I made it, Hank rejoiced silently, but it nearly cost me my life . . . .
This exciting adventure unfolds as it nears the end.

The main character was described by his difficulties.

Nice work.
Congratulations, Raymond, on placing 1st place in the Intermediate category and moving up to the Advanced category. I just knew you would move up; It wasn't a matter of if but when.

I liked the building tension throughout. The ending, though not anti-climatic, would be better if seen through the eyes of the MC.

Congrats on your placement.
Congratulations on ranking 1st in your level and 17 overall! Happy Dance!
Congratulations on your level win with this exciting tale.