The Official Writing Challenge
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07/23/16
Great writing, the reader can feel the exhaustion and pain your MC is going thru. Nice resolution at the end.
07/24/16
I was pulling for Hank all the way, hoping he would survive. I think the last paragraph summarized the story well but might have flowed even better if it had written from the MCs point of view. Instead of Hank made it . . . it could have started with something like, "I made it, Hank rejoiced silently, but it nearly cost me my life . . . .
This exciting adventure unfolds as it nears the end.

The main character was described by his difficulties.

Nice work.
07/28/16
Congratulations, Raymond, on placing 1st place in the Intermediate category and moving up to the Advanced category. I just knew you would move up; It wasn't a matter of if but when.

I liked the building tension throughout. The ending, though not anti-climatic, would be better if seen through the eyes of the MC.

07/28/16
Congrats on your placement.
Congratulations on ranking 1st in your level and 17 overall! Happy Dance!
08/22/16
Congratulations on your level win with this exciting tale.