The Official Writing Challenge
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This entry has some great writing. I enjoyed it, but would've liked to know what Warren wanted to accomplish with his experiment. Was it just to blow out the lights? Solve a world problem? Maybe it's just my tired brain. LOL But, good job. God bless.
You certainly have a good imagination! I liked the suspense, and also would like to know Warren's purpose. But as for the writing, it was well done. I believe hooping and hollering should be whooping?
You made me want to keep reading - exciting and suspenseful! But I couldn't figure out want you were try to get across. The second half really had me scratching my head. He looked at the pile of snow, but when he went to the tarp there was no pile of snow. And what did his co-worker see that made him shut the door after one quick look? I liked the details and descriptions that put me into the scene, and I want to know more!!
This was a multi-layered entry...and you have a wonderful imagination.

Like Warren...your mind had a purpose...and you did a fine job in bringing the story to life.

Warren works as a researcher and experiments on new discoveries and such. So his purpose was to evaporate a pile of snow perhaps putting snow shovels and snowblowers out to pasture!

And at the end he finally had the right mixture! was your piece.

I thought it was excellent.


Congratulations on your highly commended story.