The Official Writing Challenge
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06/18/16
A great message in this poem - while me may appear to "fizzle out" we know that failure, and even death, is not and ending, but the potential for the beginning of something and better. I think this is my favorite line:
"To get up and rise again
is the privilege of men."

06/19/16
I thought your poem contained many examples of rising from the ashes.

I don't think the line, a fizzy drink we comprehend, fit where you put it. However, my favorite line followed: To get up and rise again is the privilege of men.
06/22/16
Good message!

Blessings~