The Official Writing Challenge
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This is great. I could really feel the connection between MC and machine. Especially in the beginning it seemed to flow really well. Poetry isn't my strongest suit by far though. I noticed you repeated a rhyme. Here are some quick suggestions to avoid that repeat:
so much information
A delightful fare.
Of course, you could also use words like care, fair, bare, tear, lair, dare, hair, mare, pair, square,and ware. I couldn't come up with lines for them all because my rhythm is horrible, but just wanted to give you some choices. For the most part, the lines flowed off the page in an almost musical way. Good job.
05/31/16
Wow-Well done!!

Blessings~