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05/05/16
Thanks for taking us through the Bible and sharing truths. Great encouragement for women. My red ink is to perhaps shorten some of your longer sentences.
I felt the story could have flowed smoother if some of the sentences could have been divided into shorter sentences.
05/10/16
Well done, and entertaining!

Blessings~
05/11/16
A few years ago our women's group did a study on women of the bible.

I had chosen to teach on Abigail. At the time I didn't know the story that well, but she became one of my favorites.

I love the line, "the way to a man's heart is through his stomach." I do agree with you, I think it started with Abigail.

Thanks for reminding us of this wonderful story of courage and obedience.
05/12/16
Your article was clearly written to educate, and I certainly was! I appreciated being taken through the historical account with the clever commentaries. The tone of the piece is engaging and not unnecessarily 'preachy'. I appreciated that.
Red ink note: In the first paragraph, your use of a semi-colon is not quite right. A full sentence needs to follow it, not a phrase. Use a colon instead.
Blessings!