The Official Writing Challenge
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You have a gift for storytelling. Be aware of your punctuation and sentence structure. This is good writing, and with a little tweaking, I believe it will become excellent. Keep writing.
02/17/16
Impressive story, well done.

Blessings~
Great story. Made my mouth water! It really would have sent me to an Italian restaurant if you described or named the rest of the ingredients - or are you keeping them secret!

Not sure why the *** was there. If it was to show transition in time you could have used a word instead like ...Returning dressed in jeans...

Definitely seek some details on sentence structure and capitalization. I think Noni, Momma, and Poppy need to be capitalized - but check it out with the experts. :)
02/18/16
Homemade Italian food is the best. I think there is nothing better than the family cooking together.
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