The Official Writing Challenge
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01/21/16
Wow! I loved this story. Well done.
01/22/16
Well written story. I liked the dialog between the MCs.
01/24/16
Loved this story - dialogue - characters etc. Only minor red ink is I think you should have left off "can" after the word Coke. Makes it almost sound like he drank the can.
01/24/16
Your story was powerful and convicting. Piggy-backing on Pat Small's comment- You could even change coke can to "can of Coke" if you were concerned coke might be mistaken for the street drug given the setting of the story.
01/27/16
Excellent!

God bless~
01/28/16
Congratulations on second place!!
01/28/16
Congratulations!


God Bless~
01/28/16
Well done! Congratulations on 2nd place.
01/28/16
Congratulations on your 2nd place award in the intermediate category.

I really thought this story showed a positive side to humanity.
01/28/16
Wow, touching and intense.

Congratulations on your second place win!

Blessings,
Claire
Congratulations on ranking 2nd in your level and 11 overall. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.
02/04/16
Very heart-warming story. Congratulations!