The Official Writing Challenge
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11/19/15
Powerful descriptions. The last couple stanzas were my favorites.

I liked how you took out one word from each stanza and built on it with the next.
11/24/15
I like the strong use of imagery in this piece and the repetition which helped to deepen the meaning in each stanza. Thank you for sharing.
11/26/15
Congratulations on your 1st place in Intermediate.
Congratulations on ranking 1st in your level and 17 overall. Happy Dance!
12/04/15
Congratulations Loni - Well done.