The Official Writing Challenge
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10/09/15
I enjoyed reading your story. You did well with the dialogue.

Critique: You ended very abruptly. Perhaps you could add how the two characters parted.

All the best. :)
10/10/15
I loved this entire piece!
Well done.
God bless~
10/10/15
You've packed a lot of description and feeling in here, but unfortunately you've left us up in the air with such an abrupt close.
You've set the scene for very credible and worthwhile project for a novel that could unpack your characters and allow us to travel back with them.
You have a compelling story here. I really enjoyed it Good job; however, I also feel It ended abruptly. You left me wanting more...can't get better than that:)
I agree... write some more of this story! :o)