The Official Writing Challenge
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Date
09/13/15
You've covered a lot of geographical and emotional territory here, with so much to tell.
You write with flair and clear enthusiasm, but could I suggest a couple of minor tips:
A few more paragraphs would help us with time to catch our breath.
It may have also been better to focus on one or two highlights and expand on them - leaving the rest for future Challenge topics - so we could enjoy more of this part of the trip with you.