The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow this is wonderful. You really captured the topic in this touching piece. Your dialog was spot on. I could hear the whine that only a teen can manage. The pacing was perfect. Although I should have seen the ending coming, it still surprised me and tugged on my heartstrings. This is one of my all time favorites for sure.
08/28/15
Beautiful and well-written story.
08/28/15
Simply brilliant! This is an executed with masterful craftsmanship. I'm in awe:) thanks for sharing this moving piece!
08/28/15
You crept up on us with how accurate your title was in this brilliant entry. I'm sure it will be up there wth the winners. Well done.
08/29/15
The others have summed up well how I too feel after reading this story. Well done!

08/29/15
Excellent!

God bless~
Very clever take on the topic. I loved the fun in it. The only spot of red ink is you need to use commas when one character addresses another, for instance 'did you see the big house, Dad?' etc. but this is a very minor point. That said, I really enjoyed this well written piece. Great job!
09/03/15
Congrats
God bless~
Congratulations on your EC! Happy Dance! I knew I liked this one. ;)