The Official Writing Challenge
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08/14/15
I liked your descriptions of the moneychangers at the Temple. It was really a fresh perspective on this Bible passage.
08/15/15
I liked this current take on the old scene. I thought you did a good job on it,
08/16/15
This is really good!

One small (very small) suggestion. You have your MC saying that "the head guy" came in and drove everyone out. Then you have him use the name Jesus. How did he know who it was? A simple line of "Then I knew He was this Jesus everyone had been talking about" at some point.

Great job on this. I loved the bits of humor... Used camel salesman. That's awesome.
08/20/15
Your unique and plausible twist and POV of this NT occurrence was well crafted and a pleasure to read.