The Official Writing Challenge
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08/14/15
I loved the descriptions of the Japanese tourists with their cameras flashing. The MC with his blonde hair and impish grin was delightful.
08/16/15
This is good.

You had more words to play with here. It think I would have expanded this a bit. Maybe even made if from your son's POV. What made him stray? What was it that caught his eye? Was he worried, or just soaking it all in?

I like the spiritual tie in at the end.
08/19/15
This was well done. I know that fear when you can't find those little bodies.
08/20/15
Thank you for your kind and constructive comments. I am delighted and blessed.