The Official Writing Challenge
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07/17/15
A good reminder. Needs more paragraphing and white space,
07/17/15
Poignant and gentle reminder along with a good message.

God bless~
This is a touching story. I can imagine how overwhelmed the MC felt. I enjoyed it. My biggest complaint is I'd have loved to read more, see body language, hear dialog and feel thoughts and emotions. Don't be afraid to jump in and commit. It can be scary, but the rewards will be amazing. It makes me wonder how often I let my fear stop me from seeing God's love in the most unexpected places. You did a fine job with this one.