The Official Writing Challenge
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07/10/15
Wonderful introspective piece with a powerful message.

Well done.

God bless~
07/10/15
Great introduction. It was a heartbreaking story with an uplifting ending.
This is a lovely testimony. You did a fine job of showing how your heart ached. It's funny how we humans let things build up. I'm sure everyone can relate in one way or another.

Although you touched on the topic, your story wasn't immersed in it. I'm sure the vacation was just one small part that led to the bitterness. In my opinion, you didn't miss the topic entirely, but I think the other criteria will score higher with the judges. Of course, I could be totally wrong.

You did a great job of creating an opener that pulled me in. You did a nice job with the transitions too in this well-written story. I could feel the pain of the MC, and that's not always easy to do. I also enjoyed your message. God has plans for us; we just need to learn to get out of his way. Your ending was good too. It made me stop and examine my life. That's always a good thing.