The Official Writing Challenge
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I loved the opening and how you used colour in such a descriptive way. Great job!
This story was captivating all the way through. It was sad, but it was triumphant also. Yes, God has already won. Thank you for sharing this.
You are a story teller and used powerful imagery to set the scene and capture the emotions.

A bit of red ink: you mixed up the tenses at the end.

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Very descriptive work, though your extended italics were a slight distraction from the overall strength of your story and its message.
I enjoyed this. There is a lot of emotion packed into only 750 words or so. Your message is a great one too.
Powerful. Held my attention throughout. Keep writing!
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This was a wonderfully told story!
Congratulations on placing 1st place in your level!