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01/23/15
Very good! Few words, but packed with a lot of story and character. I love the ending. One red ink: "retch" means to gag. I think "wretch" is the word you meant. (But the visual fit your male mc. :) )
01/24/15
Great job with this piece. I've known couples who have separated for similar reasons.

Excellent!

God bless~
01/25/15
Great dialogue going on here, and the tension between the two characters is palpable. I hope you do well on your creative entry.
Enjoyable short story that captured the topic. 'Gluttony' oozed out of these two dialogues:
"You didn't see the truck?"
"I saw the food cart..."
Quite Funny.
Well done and God bless
01/29/15
Congrats

God bless~
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