The Official Writing Challenge
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10/30/14
Excellent story. God is with us always, and this entry brings that message home loud and clear. Well done.

God bless~
11/01/14
Great story! I would take another look at the sequence where she falls to the ground. It was unclear to me at first if she was looking at another person in front of her with an ashen face looking behind her, or if she had turned around after falling on her face to behold her stalker who now had an ashen face looking forward and behind her. Perhaps this crucial scene could be re-written to clarify exactly what is going on for the reader.
11/01/14
I like the message of Divine protection, unseen but not unfelt. It is sad when a place of refuge becomes a place of terror instead, but God's presence can redeem and restore! Good story!
11/06/14
Congratulations!

God bless~