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07/17/14
Delightfully imaginative! I found the ending a little abrupt—perhaps the pressure of the word limit, but this is very well done with great underlying lessons as well.
A fun read with great imagery. Well done.
Oh what a delightful allegory. You did a wonderful job of balancing telling and showing. I found this a compelling read and a brilliant piece about extremes. You juxtaposed them beautifully. With all that has happened in the world these past few days, your piece bubbles over with common sense.

I only have one or two minor thoughts. The beginning was a tad weighted down with back story. I think if you spread it out more, sharing a bit more here and there, especially in the girls' dialog, it might have been more balanced. That's just my opinion though, and no matter what, I believe it's a brilliant piece. The other thing is quite minor and something a fellow FW taught me. I believe you meant complementary with an e not an i (complimentary).

You nailed the topic in the most wonderful, fresh and original ways. This piece is different than many I've read and it's a refreshing change. It's one of my favorites this week for sure.
07/21/14
Outstanding job! This was unique in its approach and delivery. Masterful job.

Well done!

God bless~
07/21/14
It is refreshing to read something that is a cut different and makes you think. So many thoughts ran through my head and I could relate this to many situations in life.

Isn't that what creative writing is all about?

Great job!
07/24/14
Congrats!

God bless~
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