The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a sweet story. It does seem like some families seem to get hit with grief much harder than what we think is fair. Through the grace of God, people, especially like Stella, bounce back. I noticed quite a few little errors that a good proofread could catch, some missing words and things like aids instead of AIDS and Thanksgiving is one word. Overall, though, you did a great job. I enjoyed your characters and you nailed the topic. Nicely done.
06/16/14
Touching poignant and insightful story.

Well done.

God bless~
I liked the series of tragic events.

The aunts activities with other hurting individuals seemed to be her way of bouncing back.

Good story.
06/17/14
I enjoyed your story. I did notice a lot of passive writing. The best advice I received, and still working on, is to show and not tell. Keep keep up the good work.