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06/05/14
I was totally engrossed in this story and couldn't wait to see the outcome. Well done, and a powerful ending that came in with a subtle approach.

Great writing here!

God bless~
Interesting scenario, well put together. Common yet contrasting situations. The emotions shown ranged from high to very low.

Your demonstration of the working of the Holy Spirit was well laid out. "How can I do what I don't want to do that I know I should do."

I thought all the element were well put together.
06/07/14
This was a fascinating piece. You did so good in describing the emotion that your MC felt as the announcement was made that I instantly recognized those same feelings in the pit of my own stomach. Way to put me there.

Your settings and dialogue are wonderful and the you gave just the right touch of the Holy Spirit at the end.

Great job!
06/07/14
Powerful story, It had me roped in from beginning, Especially enjoyed the ending's mercy and grace imparted. Well done.
06/07/14
Nice job on this. You commented that you didn't expect it to end this way... I love it when I'm surprised by the ending as an author. :) I like this ending better.
06/08/14
Interesting story. Interesting dialogue depicting the contrast of your two characters. When the Holy Spirit intervenes, marvelous things happen.
06/08/14
Your story highlights the dramatic difference between the two sides of the argument. One side sees no issue at all, talks about it with ease over a cup of coffee, and wonders what all the fuss is about, the other rolls in agony at what they see as mass murder. Tragic.

But then the truth is revealed -- Alice, please, I dont need to hear that right now.

Even behind their calm, the truth is at work and the issue revealed for what it is.

You portrayed this well.

Blessings.
06/13/14
Congratulations Milly!

Getting to be a habit huh?

LOL

God bless~