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12/14/13
Oh my. I had to read this one twice. I got it! It is exquisitely written about my own past as well, I will not lie. And yes, Jesus sees my sin and forgives me.

Your use of descriptive words slays me. Excellent!
12/14/13
Graphic and totally credible depiction of the other side of sin's allure, told with a powerful sense of authenticity. How clearly do we need to stay focused on all that God is calling us to do for him and for others, to keep from succumbing to satan's accusations of memories that cannot be changed - but which can be forgiven through God's grace.
This should rate highly.
This is a powerful piece. I applaud your courage in your transparency. It is like many to cover up sin. The thing is we need not to make it more appealing because Jesus came and died just for that reason. He can make us clean once more.

For me it bordered on the purple prose side. I understand why you did it, but I may have held back just a tad on some of the bigger words and told it in more common language. That is just my opinion though and others may see it as being quite helpful to your message,

Your message is a powerful one and one we all need reminding of. In our desire to help others feel better, we need to be careful to not cover up too much of the stench of sin, but hand it over to Jesus, beg for forgiveness and go out into the world as a new person. Great job overall. Very provocative and thought-provoking--the earmarks of good writing.
12/16/13
Wow, hugely potent portrayal of the human condition that the Apostle Paul referred to in Roman's 7. I love the fact that Paul and you answer the question, "Who will rescue me from this body of death?" Paul answered, "Thanks be to God, through Jesus Christ our Lord." He is the answer to our hearts dirty condition!

This is quite the descriptive piece, almost too much, but not quite. It forces the MC's sense upon the reader, pulling us right into the fray. Good job!
I am so glad I read this twice. Certainly a piece that one can identify with more and more if we were to truly look at ourselves. I love the hope given to the reader at the end, as true forgiveness is found in Jesus Christ; a gift to undeserving man.
12/17/13
We all have sins that threaten to pull us under.

Thanks be to God, He sent His Son to pull us out of the mire and make us white as snow.

A very well-written piece, Judi. Thank you for the reminder to continue striving for the perfection Messiah offers us.
All your comments bless and encourage this old gal - thank you. I love you all . . .
Congratulations on your first place win in your level and for ranking 15 overall! (The highest rankings can be found on the message Boards.)Happy Dance!!
01/07/14
Epic descriptions of the sin that so easily besets us.

This one in particular I struggled with too, not realizing the damage my provocative (sleezy to be truthful) style created.

It breaks my heart that I can't explain it to the young women in my life without seeming judgmental.

My 5 year old granddaughter is already mimicking the 'stars' of this age.

Let us all pray that the spirit of enticement be broken from our youth and a spirit of innocence again become the norm!
01/07/14
By the way-- congratulations on your win and thank you for the risk you took sharing this with us.
It seems nobody wants to talk about the dead elephant in the room. You did, and I am very moved by it.

Your description of sin, reveals the reason our Father can not even look upon us (Isaiah 59:2,) until Christ Jesus cleanses us from all unrighteousness (1 John 1:9.)

This is a wonderful piece and deserved to win this challenge. Well done! Congrats!