The Official Writing Challenge
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11/08/13
Good message that gave me chills up and down my spine! Very well done...this should be up on a billboard for all the non-believers to see, give them something to think about.

Nicely done.

God bless~
Each of our lives will have that final moment.

What we did with our life will make a difference.

Jesus said, Wide is the gate and broad is the way that leads to destruction and many find or choose this way.

Your conversation style was a good way to present the message.

The ending was dramatic but so true for all who do not put Jesus as both Lord and Christ.
Your story kept my attention and I liked the title. You did not use quotation marks to bracket conversation and that caused some confusion. Numerous books provide punctuation guidance to help writers make their work shine; using one will help take your work to the next level. I look forward to reading your next submission.