The Official Writing Challenge
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Gripping. Excellent. I want to write like you when I grow up! So wondrously imaginative!
Loved this entertaining and delightful well written entry! A joy to read.
Thank you.

God bless~
Great story and nice job of letting us build some questions along the way.

The 2nd use of 'tempered' sounded odd to me, as did the poison and senses line with rolling as the verb.

Thank you for sharing this.
I enjoyed the intrigue and the ending satisfied. Well done.
A gripping story. Kept me reading and the ending was satisfying.

Thanks for sharing.
This is a gripping story and also a chilling one. You've done a great job with this.
Whoa. Powerful and dark but it ended with an insightful lesson.
Good job creeping me out as I tried to figure out who was who and doing what.
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