The Official Writing Challenge
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11/15/05
I likeed your style and the way you used the reference. You caught her emotions very well.
11/16/05
Good thoughts, characterizations and dialogue. And ending with hope. Good story!
Very good job of a 'real life' situation. Thank you for not giving your reader a simplified 'all problems solved ending'. You skillfully kept it real. I like this one!
11/17/05
I'm so glad you've given us our happy ending! Well done!
Oh how I empathise with Madi! This was handled very well - you caught exactly all those questions a child asks that can make an adult feel so 'uncomfortable'. God bless
11/18/05
Good Job Jules! I'm sorry that Madi's mother died though. I am glad the husband is out of her life. Very good story. Is there more to come?
11/19/05
First paragraph was a writer's dream...about nature; then the story was REAL, sweet and had a"beautiful" ending. I liked it immensely...and I'm "picky"; good luck
11/19/05
Consistently beautiful work Jules! This story clearly touches something in you, and you relate it so well to the reader. Great job! :) Karen
11/21/05
Jules! This is awesome! When is this gonna be a book so I can buy it?
11/23/05
Yay!!! You're reinstated as a nice person, Jules. I'm SO glad you sorted everything out. And a beautiful daughter to boot! I love the line about the purple hair because they'd run out of brown paint! Sorry to hear that Madi's mum died, but I guess that's reasonable. Well done. Phew. I can sleep now knowing that they're okay.