The Official Writing Challenge
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07/20/13
There's a good message in your poem. I enjoyed! Thanks!
07/21/13
Lovely message, and you did a great job with the meter on this. Thanks for sharing!
07/22/13
Your poem takes us through an honest journey all the way to a wonderful ending. Very nice!
07/23/13
This was a really good poem with so many descriptive images, it is jarring and moving at once. Nicely done. This was truly beautiful.

God bless~
This is a powerful piece. My heart hurt for the MC as I read, I could relate, having had similar thoughts myself. I noticed some tiny things like angles when I think you meant angels. Punctuation can be a style choice in poems, but sometimes after using a period you start the next sentence with a cap letter and sometimes a lowercase. Those are tiny things though and what really matters is how you touched my heart. I found goose bumps popping out as I read. You did an excellent job.