The Official Writing Challenge
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Magnificent. Totally captivating. I am honored to be the first to comment on this incredibly rivetting piece. Thank you.
Wow this is a powerful piece. You did a wonderful job with pulling out the suspense in both stories.

The only red ink I might offer would be to have a smoother transition between the two stories by perhaps telling the relationship of the MC and Bubbles. Another way might be to be clearer with the timing such as suggesting as Bubbles took his last Kathy took her first breath on the new life she was granted. That's a tiny detail, though because overall you did a wonderful job with this.

The beginning intrigued me and pulled me in immediately. The ending was also quite strong and left me thinking about my own life and that is always a good thing for a story to do. You also had a clear message and covered the topic in a few different ways--all of which show the great writing job on this piece.
Congrats on the well deserved HC!
Congratulations on ranking 39 overall! (The highest rankings can be found in the message boards)