The Official Writing Challenge
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This poem tells such a sweet story. I could picture an illustration next to each verse. It would make a delightful children's book.
Thisi truly touched my heart. Your rhythm seemed almost flawless and the words you spoke rang as I remembered my childhood. Very well done.
Wow! This is gorgeous! Loved it to bits! Thank you for sharing your poetic talent.

Colin (Gold Member)
This is really good.

My only very, very tiny bit of red ink is that the rhymes and rhythms were a bit off at times.

Love the story this tells, though. Nice job.
Very well written poem...thanks for sharing...I enjoyed reading it very much...
Well done in content and style!
This is a sweet entry. It reminded me of my own childhood when my mother would rummage around the market stalls looking for a cheap length of material to sew me a dress. She couldn't afford to buy me new clothes. Thanks for writing this lovely poem. It's brought back fond memories.
I really liked the story this poem told! I always loved my black patent leathers and a pretty dress when I was young, so I can totally understand how this little girl felt! Good job! :)
Thank you for this lovely poem about a little girls dream and a mothers sacrifice. Pretty and poignant.
Very simple, evocative style that reawakened memories of feeling the pinch when I was a kid, when such high-cost items were not all that expensive in today's prices. Not that we were poor, we just didn't have any money.
Congrats! God Bless~