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This is a sweet story. I could easily picture how the MC felt when she overheard the lies.

You may want to work on more showing. You use some great adjectives and adverbs say to replace passive verbs like was with action verbs. For example instead of saying her face went from the happiest to the saddest, tell us what that would look like- She pressed her lips together until they turned a pale pink as she blinked back tears that threatened to fall down her cheeks. That's probably not the greatest description but hopefully helps show what I mean.

You did a great job of developing the conflict in the story. Your message is agreat one and reminds me of something my mom used to say Believe nothing that you hear and only half of what you see. Good job.
Glad Sheila trusted that the truth would come out. Gossip can be very hurtful. Thank you.