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This is a beautiful story. I would like to have read more, such as why did she feel so trapped? I'm so pleased she was able to see the light out of her dark world at the end. Well done.
very interesting and evocative. Eleanor seemed to be an old person in lots of the description the old record, the knitting, the isolation and it was interesting and telling that she was only 25. I was curious too she seemed perhaps not to be in good health for some reason and the feeling of being "stuck" came over powerfully but you left the reader curious.... perhaps this is a good thing because it added to the interest. If this was an extract from a novel I sure would buy the book!!
I enjoyed watching the transformation of this poor lonely soul. It is so easy to get wrapped up in one's self. I could relate to Eleanor while she was listening to Lonely people. When you quote a song or someone make sure you cite where it is from. Again you pulled me in from beginning to end.
I was pleased that Eleanor made the decision to break out of her doldrums but it seemed too much too soon after the build up. I too, liked the mystery of her character and similarity to her namesake. Has potential.
I hope the MC has the courage to break out of her loneliness. This is a well-written piece. I could relate to Eleanor's thoughts and feelings of loneliness. Good work.