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12/02/10
Great story!
Yes, the verbal language barrier necessitates body language. I love how the touch of her hand was comforting. I could see the refusal to take the oranges.
Well done!
12/02/10
Your atmospheric descriptions are excellent. I had a bit of trouble connecting to the story - use some of the extra words to create more dimension for your characters. Good use of the topic.
12/03/10
You painted a strong picture with your characters and their determined communication. I enjoyed the story very much.
I enjoyed this very much. I can relate to your MC. Body language speaks volumes if you just observe. Thank you for a touching story and very well written.
12/03/10
a great piece. very well written and original. People can relate to that "being lost and not knowing the language" situation but your descriptions of China are truly unique
12/09/10
Congrats on your Highly Commended!