The Official Writing Challenge
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An intriguing story. I felt that I didn't entirely work out what was going on in the two parts, particularly with all the insect allusions. But you certainly kept my interest right to the end
I enjoyed reading your story. I admit to being a little confused,which is not unusual for me. Thanks for writing.
Thank you for your story. Had to reread it, but all in all very interesting.
You had some interesting characters and it was nice to see two sides of it.
Congratulations on your 1st place. You are definitely ready for the next level. Keep up the great work!
I think a more whimsical title would perhaps better suit the flavor of your story's style. I really enjoy your approach of relating adult stories in cartoonish ways. Your vocabulary (e.g. spinach in the ear) is also fun. Glad to see this get recognized & promote you to "advanced"--unlike me who simply promoted myself there. :)