The Official Writing Challenge
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All I can say is thank you for such a tender story. This touched my heart and brought tears to my eyes. You were right on target with this story. Thank you for sharing and God bless.
Awesome story. Very well-written. You built the suspense and I wanted to know how it turned out. Great writing!
This was a very interesting (though probably a bit too long) story. I loved the analogy 'limp as the spaghetti noodles'. Thanks for a good story.
This was done superbly. I knew as soon as the headache was described that she had pre-eclampsia (I used to work in OB) I was worried that the husband wouldn't figure it out in time. You did a great job of playing with just the right amount of suspense and conflict.
This is a marvelous suspense story. You really had me wondering what was wrong with the woman. I was holding my breath wondering how it would all turn out.
Fern, i really liked your story, it held me on the edge of my seat. I ran through each sentence to the very end to see what the conclusion would be. It was good story telling, that can move a heart.