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Very heartwarming and beautifully written. Family devotions are so important. I enjoyed reading this from beginning to end. Keep writing and God bless.
I loved your descriptions (made me feel like I was there) and the dialog was right on. Very well written, and nice, warm story.
04/25/10
This has such a nice, homey feel. I could see and hear all those squirmy kids poking and bugging each other. And what a Godly, patient mother! Really good job!
04/25/10
You have the child banter down perfectly. Do you have 40 children of your own?

I really enjoyed being a part of your family devotion.
What a wonderful story of a patient and loving mother and such a blessed environment for all the children to grow up in. Left me with warm fuzzies!
I can easily picture the children moving about, trying to get close to Mom. Your questions asked by the little ones were answered so gracefully by Mom.
04/28/10
I enjoyed this peek into their "family devotions." I could see all of this being played-out. Nice work!
04/28/10
Vivid imagery! You have painted the whole scene so well to the point your readers are able to feel at home as though they are present! A very well written piece.
Nice easy reading story about a snapshot of family life in a big family. How blessed you are to have come from a family like this.
04/28/10
What a warm, loving environment you took me into as I read your story. Your writing seems to be effortless...you just allow the story to spill out onto the page. That's talent.

Mona
04/28/10
This has such rich atmosphere and sweet voices. Well done!
I love you interwove the children's behavior into the family devotional time. Very engaging story.
04/29/10
I liked the way you alternated between explanation and the action of the kids, and wove it all together in a way that kept my interest, as well as giving such a strong snapshot of their homelife. Well done.