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A nice story of reminded me of a true-life experience I had when one of my friends began to drift from the Lord when we were in our early twenties. So far, there hasn't been the happy ending that you portrayed, but I can still pray for it. I enjoyed this!
I liked the angle you took on this topic. You portrayed it simply, without overdoing it. The connecting biblical passage was set off nicely at the end, as a moral to your story.
Thank you for such an interesting story. I enjoyed this very much. Satan is so devious and evil and he does everything possible to turn our eyes off God.
Good moral here, the writing was a little rough in areas, keep practicing (especially dialogue)and you will get better.
Good story for a youth group to use as a discussion-starter.

Work on "showing, not telling" for a more compelling read.

Your characters were true to the way teens often act.